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"Why do you challenge me on those three little words?" I spit and say.

I knew from that first day when we lay in the bails and you punctured
my soul.

"What fool wouldn't be able to tell when they'd found the needle in
the hay?"

But now you prick against my conscience because I know I am only six
degrees of separation from another true love...

...and someone who will cut my head off.

Posted by beth

29th Apr 2009, 00:52  


I remember that picture!

As for the words to go with it, beautiful and powerful! A summation that tells more than the story....


29th Apr 2009, 01:30

Dhamaka says:


nice one Beth, cool turning of thoughts around a photo that I also remember well

29th Apr 2009, 06:49

beth says:

Thanks all! And hello Kozika! lovely to see you around here :)

On both occassions I wrote the words before I found a picture to go with them and then tweaked the words a bit. I really love how the two interact with each other like that, bouncing bits of narrative off each other.

29th Apr 2009, 10:47

Dhamaka says:

that's why I really believe I can make this whole thing fly

29th Apr 2009, 20:08

jc1000000 says:

Three words; Enchanting.

30th Apr 2009, 10:23

Euphro says:

Wow, that is so good. The twist in the ending makes my hair stand on end :)

8th May 2009, 16:13

beth says:

Thanks! I read it to Dan and he retorted with that last line. I was quite taken with it and it was a nice, centering vision for me - two extremes like in an argument, missing the grey in which we exist.

9th May 2009, 01:16

Viv says:

yes the double act works

but then maybe that's integral to my belief

11th May 2009, 23:25